version 2 作者：徐俊
Teacher,I want to tell you...
I am studying in a high school.My English teacher is the best teacher I have ever seen.When I was a (junior)middle school student,my English was poor and I used to be very shy.I dared not to ask my English teacher for help.I never asked any qusetions to her(应该删除to，把her放到asked的后面）.I wanted to change it.I have（删除have,这是过去的事） tried using many ways to improve my English skills.But they don't（didn't） work.I was disappoint（disappointed） and discourage（discouraged）.
But（However，） when I became a high school student,everything has been（change是不及物动词，没有被动） changed.My new English teacher think that student's（students’） interest is the most important in learning.So In her class,she let us make speech in class（重复，可删去）,and even put a performance(表达错误，asks us to give put on performances in English）.I can't（couldn't） think it in the past,after a month,I was interested in English.I am not shy at all,so my English grade（grades） are increase（increasing） rapidly.
I am really thanks（thankful） to her.
我的点评：Wish you happier when studying English！Never be discouraged when facing difficulty！Ｉtrust you!
博主的话：这篇文章没有体现要对老师说的话，只是在描写他眼中的英语老师，虽然文章没有太多的错误，但由于写作的口吻有误，所以分数就不会太高了。但这篇文章感情真挚，我能体会徐俊的感受，我也看到了他的进步，比较他以前的英语功底，这篇文章可以体现他目前的英语实力了，这就是功夫不负有心人。